Peer Review Session #1

During our first peer review session, my group included Ann, Cody, Lindsay, and myself. We read over each others 2 page papers that covered important figures in our field; afterwards we had a discussion and gave feedback.
Ann’s research topic deals with End of Life Ethics, and in her 2 page paper talked about a nurse who first studied the rights and needs of dying individuals. Ann’s paper was clear, easy to read, and had a very nice flow. I didn’t find any major errors other than simple grammatical corrections. Overall, it was very well written and provided insightful information.

Cody’s research topic deals with Advertising, and his paper, “Ethics in Advertising,” focused mainly on Ben Franklin and the controversy over the things he printed and released to the public. I enjoy reading Cody’s work because he writes with an internal voice, as if he is talking, however that type of writing is not the most effective when documenting research. The only other corrections I found were the use of slash marks, and a few long sentences. The sentence structure was not “wrong” I just found that if they were shorter and more concise, the writing would be more effective and less confusing to the reader. Overall, the paper was very interesting and informative.

Lindsay wrote, “Founding Fathers of Complementary and Alternative Medical Treatment” which dealt with the origins of alternative medical practices. Her paper included a lot of information, which was interesting, but at times, was confusing. She used a lot of Chinese words that described ancient practices and books, but didn’t give an interpretation of their meaning which made it difficult to follow. I understood the basic idea, and Lindsay conveyed the main idea well, however I found myself simply skipping over all the words I didn’t understand because they were hard to decipher and all sounded the same. One last suggestion I had for Lindsey was trying not to repeat the same word (tomorrow) over and over. Overall, the paper included a lot of interesting information for example the origin of the well know symbol Yin and Yang.